This is a story I wrote about... Well, the brother of Superman. Please give me as much feedback as you want.
P.S. There are a few typos... Sorry.
JAY-EL THE BROTHER OF SUPERMAN
CHAPTER ONE: EARTH #28 During “The Crisis on Infinite Earths” – at a period when no superhero was only concerned with earth- a large meteorite, about the size of California was steadily drifting through space, quite close to the earth. Although it was clearly detectable by NASA satellites, it went practically unnoticed because of a global panic. Out of the 94 total universes there are 15 that were never explored. One of said universes is Earth 28 (also known as “Fast Earth”), a universe that is identical in almost every way to Earth One, except for the way time flows. On “Fast Earth, the orbit of earth and all other planets is slightly faster, causing the whole universe to slowly advance 20 years into the future, and would’ve advanced further had the universe not been destroyed in 1986. The meteorite was no less than 300 miles away, and was getting closer by the second. As it moved through space it barely missed the earth, but the planet’s gravity caused the meteor to change course and make a steady curve around the earth. As it was passing, the sudden sweep around the earth caused a sort of air-friction-earthquake right over the North Pole, and it started almost exactly where the “Fortress of Solitude” is. Because of earth’s gravity, it would continue to orbit around earth. So while the meteor was getting close to the earth for the first time on Earth One, that same meteor was closely circling for the third time 20 years later, and scientists (After a few years of analysis) found that the meteor would impact our planet causing a seismic tremor throughout half of the earth and could kill millions. As the meteor gained closer and closer to the earth, Superman flew up to greet it. Little did he know that the meteor was a final remnant of the explosion of krypton, causing it to become kryptonite. So even though Superman flew with great force, the kryptonite radiation affected him before he was even out of the earth’s atmosphere. The meteor then, without anything stopping it, crashed into the earth. An earthquake was even caused in almost the exact point as it was on Earth One (the “Fortress”). The earthquakes between both points in both universes caused a brief connection between the two Fortress’, causing Jor-El (Whose life force was in the Fortress) of Earth One to automatically download all the knowledge from the Jor-El of Fast Earth. CHAPTER TWO: BIO-BLUEPRINTS After the earthquake of Earth One was over Jor-El was able to process all the knowledge he obtained from “Fast Earth”. He then realized that in 20 years earth would reach its doom, and the meteor had to be destroyed as soon as possible. However, it would be next to impossible to be destroyed, for any missile would simply break it into more pieces and bring an earlier destruction with a higher mortality rate. He discovered that the meteor itself was a final remnant of krypton, which was radiated to the extent that even his son could not destroy it. So since Jor-El’s son was in another universe (Earth Two), Jor-El decided to keep it a secret from his son for as long as possible, for even though Kal-El would know of his own death, he would surely still attempt to save the earth. Jor-El knew he had to keep his son safe. Soon after exploring all of the knowledge Jor-El had downloaded from his future counterpart, he came across a program that not everyone had yet -the internet. The internet program had also stabilized a steady connection to Fast Earth’s databases, which included access to most of the information we have today. So he decided to try to find a way to clone his son without Kal-El knowing of it. Through rigorous searches he found a file from Luthor Corp entitled “Project: Superman”, which he was able to hack into effortlessly. The file was a type of journal of several failed and one successful attempt to create a clone of his son, the successful clone being called “Superboy”. By carefully studying the Luthor Corp file and other information about the art of cloning, Jor-El was able to transfer a combination of his own life force and a type of expandable life-matter (From Krypton), into a crystal from inside the fortress. There were a few problems however, one was that Jor-El had no actual kryptonian DNA to put in the crystal; the other was that he needed red solar energy to start the growth of the crystal’s cellular structure. First he had to get positive DNA, and to do that he made an extremely hard decision, he had to send someone into the Phantom Zone (A kryptonian version of Alcatraz) and extract the DNA of Zod, one of both he and his son’s worst enemies. Jor-El secretly enlisted the aid of his niece, Kara Zor-El (A.K.A. Supergirl). After hearing word of Jor-El’s needs, she flew to the fortress as soon as she could. “I am here Jor-El,” said Kara, “what do you want from me?” “I need your help Kara.” Jor-El replied, “A great tragedy is coming that will kill my son, and many of the people of earth.” “If your son is in danger, let me fight with him!” She shouted, trying to prove to Jor-El that she was just as strong as her cousin. “Together Kal-El and I can withstand any enemy!” “I did not bring you here to tell me of your strength.” Jor-El said, being firm while remaining calm. “I know that you and my son are mighty protectors of the earth, but this threat is not something you can fight. It is a large piece of radiated-kryptonian land, something that neither you nor my son can defeat. I have called you here because you are not as emotionally attached to the earth as Kal-El is, you will not act as impulsively for their safety.” “If that is the case, then I will do as you ask.” Kara said, giving in to her uncle’s side of the argument. “Thank you Kara.” Jor-El said. “Your obedience means much to me. But I must tell you this is a dangerous journey; I will have to send you to the Phantom Zone.” “Why?” “I am trying to clone Kal-El into a being that will have all of the genetic traits of a member of the El family, while at the same time making the boy immune to the substance you call, “Kryptonite.” “But why must I go to the Phantom Zone?” Kara asked, slightly upset that Jor-El did not wish to clone her, she had always wanted a sister. “This has been a painful decision, but the only DNA that will fit my genetic model is that of Zod.” “Zod?!” Kara exclaimed. “I will have to face Zod?!” Kara said, although she had never met him, she was afraid of what may happen to her “Do not fear, Kara” Jor-El said, although he himself was not afraid of Zod, he knew of the fear he struck into others. “Zod will be powerless in the Phantom Zone.” “But won’t I be powerless also?” “Not quite,” He replied, “During my days on Krypton, I invented a device that could harness the power of the yellow sun, and transfer it into any kryptonian being, giving them the same abilities one of us would have on earth, I called it the Solar Energy Capturer.” You could practically hear the pride in his voice. “But I never used it because it actually has to get its power from yellow solar energy, something Krypton lacked. You can find this device along with others you will need down in the basement of this fortress.” He said, and shortly after clearing up a few technicalities with her mission Kara was prepared to leave to the Phantom Zone. Jor-El then opened up the portal and she was pulled into the Kryptonian prison that is, the Phantom Zone. | ![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif?v=92){kind=small}
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